Hi toady I'm doing SLJ this activity is called the sky in shanghai so how this works is I need to write poem that describes my feelings of traveling to Beijing china so here is my poem.
Travel far,far from home were people think and think think think were shell I go away from this weather maybe I'll go under this feather were no one can see me with the leather.
So under I go under the feather where me and the leather stayed away from the weather.
Thank you.
BYE!!!
By Peyton.
Kia Ora Peyton,
ReplyDeleteNice work completing this Summer Learning Journey activity, 'The Sky in Shanghai.' Wow, I really enjoyed this poem of yours. I thought it was very playful and creative. I like how you have chosen your first word 'weather' and then found other words to match, 'feather' and 'leather'. Although i'm a bit confused, I would like to know what leather you're talking about. However, I thought it was really creative when you wrote, 'Travel far, far from home. Where people think and think, think, think where shall I go away from this weather.' I really enjoy how you used receptiveness which added rhythm to your poem, this is very clever! You must be very tiny to be able to hide under a feather to escape from the bad weather. I'm imagining a little mouse as the character is this poem. Would you like to travel to Shanghai one day? Or anywhere else in Asia?
I look forward to reading your response.
Thanks,
Jordan
Hey Peyton,
ReplyDeleteFantastic Work! I am really glad that you have finally completed the task of a poem to Beijing - China. Your post is really cool and I loved the way it was presented to us in a way where we can see it clearly and how it looks like. Your poem is super creative and I really enjoyed it. Thanks a lot for posting this spectacular post and I can't wait to see more incredible posts soon.
Keep up the incredible work and hope to see more soon Peyton.
Have you done a Beijing Poem before?
Cheers,
Hinerangi